How To Write Treatments
What is a Treatment?
The key to getting a deal in Hollywood is getting someone to read a script. Since the industry is so personal, the sequence of events in a "seller's" convincing a "buyer" generally begins with a chance encounter or a telephone conversation in which urgency is conveyed; and ending, ideally, with the buyer
"Okay, send it over."
"Promise me you'll read it yourself."
"I promise," the buyer lies. "How long is it?"
"Okay, but do you have a treatment?"
Because the buyer rarely has time to read a screenplay without knowing what he's about to read, the treatment very often becomes the second important step in the sequence of selling a film.
When adult education courses advertise "sell your ideas to TV" they mislead inexperienced writers who don't understand that the word "idea" is being used loosely. The inexperienced writer doesn't sell an idea. Instead, he writes his idea into a treatment, and tries, after registering it with the Writers Guild of America (which will register practically anything in written form), to get it into the hands of an active film maker. Second only to writing an entire screenplay or teleplay on "spec," your treatment is the best tool for "getting in the door" and breaking into show business.
But the treatment is a strange animal, quite unlike any other kind of writing. If a screenplay is the blueprint for a film, the treatment is the blueprint for a screenplay. Yet there are as many blueprints as there are architects, as many kinds of treatments as there are writers. Treatments are, like screenplays or theatrical plays, a secondary or "non-form" of writing. A treatment never gets produced, or published (with the exception of treatments used as examples in this book!).
On top of all that, the word "treatment" is thrown around loosely in the film and TV world and used from time to time by one executive, writer, or business affairs person or another, to mean variously a one-pager, a synopsis, an outline, or a coverage. None of this confusion helps the "outsider" writer trying to break into the business.
For the writer's purposes, what distinguishes one treatment from another is its effectiveness in making the sale, and/or laying out the story.
Everything we say in this book is intended to assist the writer in understanding and creating the treatment to serve one or the other, or both, of these two crucial purposes:
For the sake of definition, a treatment generally varies in length from 1 to 25 or more pages, depending on the kind of treatment it is and upon its purpose. The treatment of One Night Stand that garnered Joe Eszterhas $2 million was three pages long.
The typical treatment for a television movie is 7-20 pages; for a feature film 10-25 pages.
Treatments are often called "one-pagers," "leave-behinds," "outlines," or "summaries."
Kinds of treatments
In both television and theatrical filmmaking, the three most common kinds of treatments are:
"Original dramatic treatments":
Treatments of dramatic stories invented by the writer.
Treatment by the present writer of a story by another writer. A treatment for adapting "Little Women" might convince a studio to develop a script for a remake.
"Treatments of true stories":
Treatments that show how the writer would turn fact into drama, organizing actual events into characters and a compelling story line.
The uses of treatments
The use of the treatment in today's motion picture and television industries has expanded with the proliferation of cable programming, expansion of video rentals, and the industry's acutely competitive need for films and programs to fill home and theatrical screens. The usefulness of the treatment is behind the scenes, in developing a story; and/or in pitching it efficiently to filmmakers who might be sold on making the writer's story into a film.
Treatments can be tremendously useful in helping the writer envision the "overview" of his story, presenting the profile of the "woods" in contrast to the varied texture of the "trees." For a story editor or development executive, by the same token, the treatment is a useful diagnostic tool for "getting the story straight." By reading a short treatment, the editor obtains a perspective that may be lost sight of when reading a faulty script.
The written pitch:
Nothing can take the place of a live pitch, where the writer dramatizes his story to an attentive audience. But a written pitch is still needed to assist in the next stage of the filmmaking process, where the story is pitched again to the next person higher up along the chain of production. When an oral pitch is impossible, a written pitch can do the job. The treatment is "the written pitch."
It's not unusual for a treatment to be rewritten a half dozen different ways, depending on the market it's being aimed at. The three primary markets for treatments today are:
for the feature or "theatrical" motion picture;
for Internet, CD Rom, and other electronic media.
Television continually demands program material that attracts targeted audiences and gains high Nielsen ratings for its sponsors' advertising. Movies for television (also known as Movies of the Week) and mini-series based on best-selling books have become a major mainstay of prime time programming among the competing broadcast television networks and subscriber cable television. Yet a treatment written for pitching to NBC, CBS, or ABC won't work with HBO, Lifetime, or Showtime. Formats and demographic requirements are different for the various television markets. Whether you're giving your treatment to a studio or to an independent producer, it's headed eventually for a limited set of buyers, each with its own specific needs:
Broadcast television networks (ABC, CBS, NBC; Fox):
For ABC, CBS, and NBC, the primary audience is women; with each network focusing on a different age group. Movies, interrupted by commercial, must have act breaks to match the interruptions. Broadcast Cable Networks are: A&E, CNN, Lifetime, TNT, USA. The Subscriber Cable television networks are HBO, Showtime, Disney Channel and
Motion picture theater.
Feature film treatments, for the theatrical motion picture industry, work across the board for any one of the studios, mini-studios, or production companies.
Interactive media, from CD Rom to the Internet.
As electronic publishing increases by leaps and bounds, programs are being sold by treatments that allow their reader to visualize how that program will "play out" in the new electronic media.
Treatment vs synopsis
"Synopsis" is a term used in the entertainment industry to indicate a matter-of-fact summation of a story's plotline, a shorter version of the longer work (whether that work is a novel, a nonfiction book, a screenplay, or even a treatment). Think of the synopsis as a more or less complete and detailed recitation of all the scenes and events in a story, a condensed version of the plot. The synopsis' purpose is to describe, not to sell. The treatment's purpose is to sell, and that's why it's written with an intensity and urgency the synopsis characteristically lacks.
Treatment vs coverage
"Coverage" is the industry term used to describe the descriptive document provided by the story department readers for executives making acquisition decisions in theatrical film and television. Occasions for "coverage" include:
a script may be covered by a talent agency for casting purposes; by an agency, for "packaging" (attaching talent); by a director, actor, or actor's company to assess its suitability for involvement;
a production company, to assess its viability; as a writing sample, to help someone determine whether the writer should be represented or produced.
For all these occasions, the typical coverage document for sample) consists of:
identifying information (name of story, name of writer, name of person doing the coverage, type of story, etc.);
a "synopsis," as defined above;
a set of "comments" giving the reader's opinion of the cinematic worthiness of the piece covered.
a rating chart, allowing the reader to rate the piece on characterization, dialogue, (other elements).
example of coverage:
Type of Material: Screenplay
Type of Material: Script
The coverage reader's purpose is to report the strong and weak points of a story as objectively and comprehensively as possible. But a treatment, drawing its energy from its writer's personal enthusiasm, is not objective. The coverage is retained in a company's computer for future reference. Although an outstanding coverage is often used by writers, directors, and producers as a selling tool, it's generally accompanied by the treatment--the writer's vision of his story.
Treatment vs outlines
The words "outline" or "reblocking" are used to describe a list of the scenes in a cinematic story. Outlines of this kind are especially useful in the development process because they reveal the flow of the scenes, without elaboration, at a glance. An outline can be thought of as a skeleton treatment, a treatment stripped of its flesh. Where a treatment may contain dialogue to dramatize a particular moment, the outline will contain no dialogue. Basically, it's a list:
Michele dashes toward a taxi.
Inside the taxi, she phones her office in L.A.
The taxi arrives in front of the Denver court house. She jumps out, dashes up the stairs....
ype of Material: Screenplay
Title: Puppet on a String
Number of Pages:
Author: Ken Atchity and Alex Viespi
Location: San Francisco
When T.V.'s most popular talk show host marries the love of his now perfect life, a diabolical kidnapper turns his dream to a nightmare.
ARLO BARRETT is a charismatic wunderkind; the popular host of a TV. talk show called "Barrett on the Money." A savvy real estate mega-mogul, he flies his own jet, buys hotels and has the world eating out of his palm. His best friend and fellow Vietnam survivor is CHARLIE WIGGINS, Chief of the San Francisco Police Department in the throes of an unwanted, painful divorce. A perennial bachelor, Barrett finally discovers the true love of his life in CHLOE
RODIN. Beautiful, intelligent, talented, witty and kind. She's perfect! Except that she's diabetic and requires regular shots of insulin. Soon after their fairy-tale wedding and honeymoon they receive the best news of all, Chloe is pregnant. Their life is now the fulfillment of his dreams.
As Chloe leaves the doctor's office she disappears. That evening Barrett has invited his buddy Charlie to their home to commiserate with him about his martial problems. Anxious about Chloe who should have been home hours ago he tries to concentrate on his friend. The phone rings. He leaps to answer. A bizarre metallic voice, mechanically produced informs Barrett that "they" have his wife. If he fails in anyway to meet their demands, she dies. The unlikely pair of kidnappers are WAYNE
LITTREL, a huge, ex-convict, rapist-killer and KARL REIS, a taut, wiry man, slight of build and devoid of blood. He manages through wit and the force of his diabolical personality to dominate and control Wayne.
Barrett hears the harrowing news with Charlie in the next room. He pretends that Chloe is stuck at her friends' place with a car that won't start. He gets rid of Charlie.
Alone at home he realize the full impact of what has occurred. He sees his entire existence begin to disintegrate. Instead of his usual position as the man in power he is now a puppet who performs according to the whims of his "master."
Among the staff of Barrett's TV. show are: Associate Producer KATHERINE BELLAMY, efficient, intelligent, a nervous chronic smoker, CALVIN, the Director, a tense young man who seems to harbor a thinly veiled inexplicable antagonism toward "the Boss," and YVONNE, Barrett's make-up woman, with whom he enjoys an easy joke telling familiarity.
Barrett is forced to face his associates, his friends and his millions of adoring viewers as if nothing were wrong. The kidnappers instruct him to deliver half the ransom, two and half million dollars to a locker in a train station. He does. Then the kidnappers demand that he embarrass himself on his TV. show. He begins to comply but doesn't. Upon his arrival home his hopes are raised by the presence of Chloe's car in the garage. She's nowhere to be found. A phone call from Karl tells him to go to Chloe's car, to open the glove box. He finds a jewelry box containing Chloe's finger--still wearing her diamond ring. Barrett's punishment for not complying.
Next day Barrett embarrasses himself on TV. with a confession of an affair that resulted in a pregnancy which he forced the woman to abort. Network executives yank his how off the air.
Next Karl forces Barrett to fly his jet, set a collision course and bail out. He does. Karl allows Chloe to witness the plane crash from afar. She is led to believe that Barrett died in the plane. Later she learns the truth of Karl's cruel joke.
At Barrett's house during a visit from Charlie seeking aid and comfort, Charlie's investigative instincts make him suspicious of Barrett's response when he asks where Chloe is. Barrett gets a call from Karl. Charlie listens on an extension. He confronts Barrett who finally gives in and tells all. Charlie goes into action. Forensics processes Chloe's car and take evidence to Police Lab. Chloe wakens to discover that as a result of her diabetic condition, a retinal artery has ruptured and left her totally blind. Karl calls and instructs Barrett to deliver the final ransom installment. Barrett with Charlie following, drives to a warehouse on a dock. With Karl gone to the phone Wayne attempts to satisfy his long-standing lust for Chloe. In a frenzied desperate rage she blindly stabs Wayne in the eye with a pen and escapes from the motor home that has become her prison. Wayne in a tormented fury chases her through the darkened streets. Charlie arrives at the empty motor-home and takes off after Chloe and Wayne. Karl meanwhile collects the money from Barrett and disappears leaving Barrett to wait for yet another phone call. Charlie is spotted by Wayne and shot. Wounded, he falls. Barrett comes at the gallop and kills Wayne saving Chloe. Charlie dies in their arms.
A surgical procedure restores Chloe's sight. Her pregnancy is safe. Barrett's show is back on the air but we still don't know where Karl is or why his satisfaction seems to come more from his power over Barrett than the five million dollars he got.
Katherine Bellamy tells Barrett she is leaving his show and San Francisco to pursue a dream to live by a lake in a small town. She asks him to meet her for a parting drink. Barrett confesses to Chloe that Katherine is the woman he forced to abort their child five years ago. He has never really apologized and would like to. Chloe assents.
When Barrett, trailed by a stake-out detective, arrives at Katherine's house. He finds the entire floor covered in $100 bills--the last ransom payment of $2-1/2 million. Katherine is seated holding a silencer-equipped pistol on Barrett as she watches him put the pieces together. He is totally incredulous as she reveals just how psychotic she is and to what extent he has destroyed her life. She tells him that she's going to kill him and then herself. She has no reason or desire to live.
Barrett prepares to die. She holds the gun on him and at the last second turns it on herself and fires.
COMMENT: Barrett is a well-drawn multifaceted character. Aggressive and dynamic, indeed overpowering and yet in the presence of Chloe he becomes a high school boy on his first date. At first his machismo would seem to warrant more direct action at the news of Chloe's kidnapping but it soon becomes clear that he's caught in a dilemma that renders him totally helpless. He loses his identity when everything that defines him becomes irrelevant. His marriage to Chloe is romantic, sensual, ideal and believable. It overflows with love, genuine passionate love. This not a kitchen-sink drama.
Charlie is a tough but oh-so-gentle bulldog. The disintegration of his marriage plays a poignant counterpoint to the joyous beginnings of Barrett's and Chloe's marriage. He's a warm, loyal, likable and courageous friend.
When Charlie confronts Barrett with his knowledge of Chloe's whereabouts and Barrett finally relents we see the depth of their love and trust in each other. Barrett for a touching moment becomes the little boy totally dependent on his "Big brother."
The plot may profit from an additional twist or two but this is a tense psychological suspense peopled with well sculpted characters.
This story has the potential for super star casting and commercial success.